October 30 Critique

 

Everyone	Tempo was better Cheat out Sideways- forward ways Noise for button – on elevator TV room – oompa loompas move benches after elevator scene – Alex, Reagan, Sunny, Riley Ending needed work. Freeze in an emotion, then when unfreezing – continue with that motion. Step on lines. React to the kids’ rudeness. Pull the second traveler for the blueberry scene. Look down on Charlie & Grandpa.  We need a buzz when WW appears.  EXCITEMENT.  Look at the ticket. When the door closes, some people want out. Reaction was good, but have Violet and Mom try to leave and WW steps in the way. React to Violet spitting gum on the floor. When Charlie says it’s the best day – everyone react. If the bean sign is behind you, turn backwards to look at it. Then the boat sways more.
Maky	dollar in freeze Great job today. You were involved in every part of the show. Great reactions throughout the show.
Gloop	shadow freeze
Sunny	project and pull shoulders back in the beginning Think about using something to make your nose purple. Your brother said purple marker on the gum. Energy was down today – probably because of basketball Drag out the gum scene.
Drew	be smug Be more powerful with “right” Be more involved in the show at all times.  We need to see your frustration growing from the beginning to the exit.
Reese	Step on lines We need to see your body involved when  you shoot the gun.  Like getting ready to fight. Try to shoot at the Oompa Loompas. Try to shoot the squirrels. Madder at your dad the two times WW and he get on to you. See you later alligator BEFORE you go into the TV
Blake	Stress walk into the fence. Be sadder with first candy bar Carry excitement after finding the ticket into the following scenes. Why do you say Oh Yes when WW asks you if you are ready? If the bean sign is behind you, turn backwards to look at it.
Jonah	Off to the chocolate factory – no pause and don’t be sad.  You are still uplifted by the ticket Leaning over & reading the ticket – be old – we’ll give you the glasses. Help maki down – old and polite. Fall needs work. On the “winning “ scene – you were in profile so cheat out.
Riley	Use upstage hand on my mother Play sick more You are waiting too long to say your first line and the other lines.  A glutton eats fast. Love the different ways you say chocolate.
Kadyn	Know you were tired – needed more energy today – be more excited when you have ideas.  We need to see your “tricks” in  your face in the introduction. Show us you handpicked Charlie. Work on different gestures You were a little squeaky at times. Louder when you are US. Work on fiery furnace line You were good with Veruca – we could see the control you had to have to act civilly to her. DO this with everyone else.  We need to see your frustration. Be concerned at the beginning – giving the coin to Bradleigh – it’s cold and snowy – the coin could be covered. Smile when he picks up the coin. Watch him with Grandpa Joe. Perhaps maybe one of these days?  I don’t remember what this was, but check for that line.
Reagan	Watch just using the profile- cheat toward the audience.
Evan	Work on your anger growing through the play. Freeze was good, then you moved your hand. Great job with expression on desserts. Look into  your pocket to check if Mike is okay, look at him, bring him out, listen to him, then shove him back in.
Reagan	Turn to Maky- we need to see your face.  We are losing all those good expressions.
Grandpa Joe and Charlie	Too memorized at the beginning.  Charlie go around Grandpa’s chair and put your arms on his shoulder.  Grandpa – try several times to get out of your chair.  Be almost unbalanced when you get up. Don’t sit at the same time.  Charley react more Don’t lose the happiness.  Remember that this ticket is going to save your lives. React bigger to the kids’ rudeness. There must be a BIG contrast between you guys and everyone else.
Ashlynn	React to the OOmpa Loompas better – scared at first, then fascinated.
Grandpa, Charlie, Violet	Violet is being blocked when everyone first meets WW.
Squirrels and people	More time with the squirrels.  One squirrel stop and look at the people, then another, then go back to squirrel business. Have an attitude.
TV room – work on this scene	Chocolate bar should appear sooner. Everyone react to Charlie getting the bar.  GP Joe – hard to get up. Mini Mike – Grandpa and Charlie are scared.   Evan more frantic.
Oompa Loompas	Start the song at the elevator sooner. Don’t wait.  We will have new jobs for you. No jazz hands.
Boat people	Keep moving slowly across the stage – swaying.  Kadyn, tap the pole to tell people below rowing to move faster.
Mike, Dad, Joe, Charlie	React to the fact that you are the only ones left. Wonder why?  Are you frightened?
The end	Needs work – needs to build.
To do	glasses for Jonah SHOES for boys Paint shoes for girls.

 

October 27 Critiques

October 27, 2013

The middle school one act play kids will have a clinic on Tuesday, October 29 from 3:30 -5:30.  We will perform at approximately 4PM and we will keep them through our regular rehearsal, ending at 7:30PM. If you are bringing snacks on Tuesday, we may need to double up since kids will be starving after the pressure of performing for judges.  We will perform, be critiqued, then with our regular rehearsal, we will work through the changes. Parents may watch the performance and stay for critiques.  Again, I will have the kids from 2:30 PM until 7:30 PM on Tuesday, October 29^th.

 

The following day, Wednesday, October 30, I need the students at 7:30 AM and we will finish at 11:15AM.   We will perform about 8AM, and Dr. Border is allowing us to watch Brownfield’s play.

EVERYBODY	Memorize new lines Don’t move during the freezes People who were not frozen – Reese, Alex, Ashlynn, Maky,, Reagan,Riley, Ashlynn Stress verbs, not pronouns Practice the unique walks – Evan, Maky and Jonah were about the only ones  who did. Do not move while the lights are coming on. Left stage is neglected STEP ON LINES! It is a boat, touch the water. Smell the chocolate. We need more boat movement. Do not talk upstage Have all your props.  Do not depend on someone else to have them. Bounce on the elevator TV was backwards. Be sure you are in the light when you talk STEP ON LINES   STEP ON LINES   STEP ON LINES BUZZ before Wonka appears REACT   REACT   REACT   REACT BLOCKING – the people in back are responsible – move if you cannot see where the judge will be. Boat scene should be immediate.
Charlie	Enunciate – hit all consonants. Act cold when you are outside at the beginning Cap back Lines at the beginning with Grandpa – make sure they are right
Oompa Loompas	When you move props before you are seen – do it seamlessly. Hide behind the props, but hurry and move them.  All benches need to be at an angle. When you are moving props – benches, Tv, ETC later, move quietly and swiftly. Bigger and crazier For songs, step on the line before the song. Put the cabbage more downstage of the garbage Chute. Don’t move the tunnel until Drew is down it. When you hit the benches for the glass elevator, start the Veruca song.  Do not hesitate. When you finish the Veruca Salt song, start putting up the TV. Only Ashlynn and Haylee holding up the TV.  Only Bradleigh in the TV – Payton & Reagan & Alex –go to the ladders. Last song in pairs – learn it.
Alex	Sit down when holding the tunnel – ask Paige
Riley and Reagan	Cheat out more to the audience
Drew	Always stand by your daughter. Do not hit anyone. do what your parents do to you. My gosh to Willy
Evan	Do not hit anyone – do what your parents do to you.
Kadyn	As narrator, be sad about factory closing Watch swaying in first speech Crazier on augustus flavored gloop. Don’t lick the hand Delicious adventure – hit delicious Be deviously crazy Pause & you must be Charlie – tilt head show tenderness toward him
Payton	Wait until Bradleigh stops the boat.
Jonah	More heartfelt on no Wonka is not (crazy) Jonah, you and Charlie move the benches if they are not at an angle.
Sunny	Be brattier when your mom gives you the paper
Maky	Smile and be embarrassed about your child, then be stern with Sunny Put camera in your purse when not using it. Squirrel head – we need it.
Drew	Be cocky with everyone but Veruca
Jonah and Blake	Just two pauses on reading the ticket.  It was a little long with all the pauses. Sink face from Carson Don’t block the garbage shoot.  Sit with bench at an angle When discovering ticket, Blake you can say Hurray – not yes First Hurray – Jonah Second hurray – Blake It’s off to the chocolate factory – Jonah – then hug Charlie with tears toward the audience
Reese	Point at the gun at the OL’s when Veruca screams Louder and use lower register in voice Pumping full of lead – diction and louder
Reagan	More variety in speech - diction
Ashlynn	We won’t touch a thing ;- touch something We need a lace dickey for you.
Maky and Reagan	Don’t talk upstage
Blake	Do something with your hands at the end.
Bradleigh & Payton	Move when everyone is out of the boat. Like the boat is rocking.
Alex and Haylee	Move gobstoppers on – enter from left stage.
Squirrels	Stay out until the scene has shifted. Be out there earlier when the focus is on the previous scene.
To do	More music with Charley’s scene.  More music before boat scene. Bump on Elevator?
	Notecards with pictures of kids
	Handkerchief with gloop, Gob stoppers
	Gold spray, Cotton candy
	Silver dollar
	Glasses for Jonah
	Lace dickey for Ashlynn
	Check music with boat scene.

October 15 Rehearsal

Excellent Job!!!! I admit I was worried Sunday.

Thanks to the alternates.  I appreciate how much you have worked – painting the set, working on props, and writing critiques.  You have been invaluable.

Everyone	·         We need to start storing props in the back with the gray set.  We are at the end of our $, and we still have over a month using the props.  We need to be careful with them.  The same goes for costumes, so be sure that all your props and all your costumes are put up. ·         EVERYONE needs to be bigger and wackier except for Grandpa and Charlie.  Be over the top!  So much that I have to tell you to tone it down. ·         Jonah & Reese moved at the beginning’s freeze. ·         DO NOT WALK BEHIND THE CYCLORAMA ·         If you make a mistake in a line…just keep going. ·         Quicker on the first walk. You must be back by the time the music stops.	·
Oompa Loompas	·         Be more in sync with Augustus’s song ·         Each Oompa Loompa needs his/her own personality.  If you are another character – it needs to be different from that one.  Have these ready on Sunday. – like the seven dwarfs. ·         Be careful that you are not seen at the beginning. ·         Smile crazily during the songs and all the time.   ·         I want you CRAZY!!!	·
Reagan & Alex	Remember to switch with the signs for the boat.
Grandpa	Get a newspaper.  We need to find you reading glasses that you can wear around your neck.
Music	Elevator music needs to be longer. I will take care of this and get Spencer another script – Spencer – we are killing dozens of trees L We will try a gong after a child disappears. Louder on the boat music until someone talks. Different music at the end.
Drew	Ruder – not violent with WW. Stay with your daughter.
Reagan	Cheat out to the audience more when Augustus disappears. We will fix your dress.
Elevator people	Look forward and a little up when punching buttons.
Riley	Louder on “I’m hungry. I want to eat!” Sneeze and cough more at different times. We need to work on your costume.  It is all one color.  We will figure something out. Fall more toward left stage at the beginning so you are not blocked by the Teevees. We will figure out something with the tube.  It needs to be faster,but that was impossible with the fat suit and hoola hoops.
Ashlyn	Slow down on the It’s impossible speech. Scream all the way down the chute. Look at script during the squirrel scene.
WW	Slow down on that means you’ve won.
Charlie & Grandpa	Make sure that you are not blocking one another. When reading the ticket, let Grandpa help with big words.
Charlie	Be vocal when you find the Golden Ticket. Look at your lines in the boat.
Lights	More light on the OOmpa Loompas More light on Augustus at the river.  Do the best you can.
Squirrels & cabbage	Out earlier. One Oompa loompa needs to pretend to sweep the cabbage out. Let’s put the cabbage in a bushel basket. So, we need two OOmpa loompas doing the job. Squirrels don’t worry about sliding down the slide.
Riley and Maky	Stay in character on the ladders.
Reese	In the television, I want you to strike several poses before you disappear. If you don’t remember to say See you later alligator, Lights and Sound will miss their cues. They depend on you.
NEW ENDING	Charlie, Grandpa and Willy are the only ones left besides Oompa Loompas.
WW	Which room shall it be next:  Hurry up!  We must be going!  And how many children are left now?Wonka looks around.  Hmmmmmm!
Grandpa	I guess there’s only Charlie left now.
WW	You are the only one left?
Charlie	Why, yes.
WW explodes with excitement	But my dear boy, that means you’ve won! WW shakes Charlie’s hands vigorously.  Oh, I do congratulate you!   I really do!  I’m absolutely delighted!  How wonderful this is! I had a hunch, you know……right from the beginning….that it was going to be you!  Well done, Charlie…well done! WW looks around and motions to the OLs. But we mustn’t dilly. OLs nod and begin working…. Carrying bushel baskets here and there. And we mustn’t dally!  We have an enormous number of things to do before the day is out!  Just think of the arrangements that have to be made!	One carries a huge bowl as another OL stirs.  Another places candy on a baking pan.
Charlie	Wait, Mr. Wonka….I’m afraid I don’t understand all of this!  What are you talking about?
WW	Oh…. Do forgive me!  I get carried away at times.  I forgot that you didn’t know….
Grandpa	Know what?
WW	I love my chocolate factory….. tell me, Charlie…Do you love my chocolate factory?  Think carefully because it’s very important.
Charlie	Well, I’ve never spent a more fantastic day anywhere …. In my whole life.  Do I love this factory?  Yes…. Yes, I think I do!  It means a great deal to me!
Grandpa	Why do you ask?
WW	Well, of course Charlie and all of the others will receive all of the candy I promised, but I want Charlie to receive much more!  You see, this whole day has been a contest.  It’s been a contest to find out who would be the best person for the job.
Charlie	What job!
WW	I would like for you and Grandpa Joe to move here and live here permanently.  I would like to have someone who will take over…. After I’ve gone.  This would be after I’ve trained you and taught you everything I know, of course!  I’ve watched you all day, and you are the type of person that will appreciate this factory and care for it as I have, all these years.  Will you accept my offer?  If you do, everything that I have is yours!	Oompa Loompas bring aprons over to Charlie and Grandpa and put a chef’s hat on Charlie
Charlie	Will I? Wow!  This is more than I could have ever imagined!  Will I? Of course I will, Willy Wonka!  Thank you!   Thank you! Just think of it, Grandpa Joe!  It’s going to be our chocolate factory!  Just think of all that chocolate!  Oh, just you wait and see!